IELTS-writing exercise Expository_Text_18

动态图表+图表作文如何替换表达

Q: The charts give information about the proportions of boy sand girls of a school who achieved high grades (A or B+) in respective courses.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.

Model

首段

改写题目

The charts show the changes in the performances of boys ansd girls in different subjects in 1996 and 2000.

主体部分第一段（从男性最高值开始说起，注意趋势的分类）

男性的最高值是Humanities

Over 42% of boys achieved a high grade in humanities in 2000, up from 21%. The proportion of girls who achieved this standard in this subject was lower at 25% in 2000, although it was 32% in 1996.

然后说Arts

Boys also improved their performance in the arts significantly with the figure rising from 9% to 21%, while the proportion of high-achieving girls dipped to 25%.

主体部分第二段（从女性最高值开始说起，注意趋势的分类）

女性的最高值是Languages

Girls performed better than boys in languages, although the percentage of top achievers declined from 45% to 31%.

女性的其他上升的值Science，Maths

There were also improvements in science and maths, in which the proportions of girls who achieved a good grade rose to 11% and 15% respectively.

对比男性

In contrast, the figures for boys in these two courses dropped.

总结段

总结趋势和主要特征

Overall, boys outperformed girls in science and maths, but the gap narrowed. While a larger propotion of boys reached higher standards in the arts, humanities as well as languages, the figures for girls saw a decline.

Model

The charts show the changes in the performances of boys ansd girls in different subjects in 1996 and 2000.
Over 42% of boys achieved a high grade in humanities in 2000, up from 21%. The proportion of girls who achieved this standard in this subject was lower at 25% in 2000, although it was 32% in 1996. Boys also improved their performance in the arts significantly with the figure rising from 9% to 21%, while the proportion of high-achieving girls dipped to 25%.
Girls performed better than boys in languages, although the percentage of top achievers declined from 45% to 31%. There were also improvements in science and maths, in which the proportions of girls who achieved a good grade rose to 11% and 15% respectively. In contrast, the figures for boys in these two courses dropped.
Overall, boys outperformed girls in science and maths, but the gap narrowed. While a larger propotion of boys reached higher standards in the arts, humanities as well as languages, the figures for girls saw a decline.

学习点

1. 常用单词的替换

	上升	下降
程度比较轻微	climb	dip,slide,fall
程度一般	increase,rise,grow	decline,drop,decrease,diminish
程度激烈	spirla,soar,rocket,surge,shoot up,leap	plumb,plunge,plument, nosedive, tumble, slump

2. 常用程度副词

轻微	slightly,modestly,moderately,marginally
显著	considerably,remarkably,notably,noticeably,markedly,substantially,significantly
极为显著	dramatically,radically,exponentially.