IELTS-writing exercise Expository_Text_19

动态图表+总结段的写作

Q: The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projectins for2050.

Summarize the information vy selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where revelant.

Model

首段

改写题目

The charts show the changes in the age profile of two countries in seperate years, 2000 and 2050.

主体部分第一段（先写Yemen2050年的最高值15~59岁的人，其次是14岁以下的人，都要和意大利进行对比）

最高值是15~59岁的人

In Yemen, the proportion of people aged 15 to 59 is expected to rise significantly from 46.3% to 57.3% in 2050.

对比意大利的这一年龄段

This age group will also make up the largest proportion of Italy’s population (46.2%) in 2050, despite a decline from 61.6% in 2000.

然后说14岁以下的人

The figures of those who aged under 14 are likely to drop in both countries. Only 37% of Yemen’s population is projected to fall into this age group, while the figure was much higher at 50.1% in 2000.

对比意大利

In Italy, the figure will decline to a lesser extent from 14.3% to 11.5%.

主体部分第二段：些老年人

最高值是意大利的老年人

Those aged 60 or above are projected to represent 42.3% of Italy’s population in 2050, an increase of around 18%.

然后说Yemen的老年人

Yemen is also likely to see an increase in the proportion of elderly people in 2050 at 5.7%, although this age group will represent the smallest section of the population.

总结段

总结趋势和主要特征

Overall, the projection is that the populations of both countries will become oldr. Italy had an older population than Yemen in the year 2000, and the same is also predicted in 2050.

Model

The charts show the changes in the age profile of two countries in seperate years, 2000 and 2050.
In Yemen, the proportion of people aged 15 to 59 is expected to rise significantly from 46.3% to 57.3% in 2050. The figures of those who aged under 14 are likely to drop in both countries. Only 37% of Yemen’s population is projected to fall into this age group, while the figure was much higher at 50.1% in 2000. In Italy, the figure will decline to a lesser extent from 14.3% to 11.5%.
Those aged 60 or above are projected to represent 42.3% of Italy’s population in 2050, an increase of around 18%. Yemen is also likely to see an increase in the proportion of elderly people in 2050 at 5.7%, although this age group will represent the smallest section of the population.
Overall, the projection is that the populations of both countries will become oldr. Italy had an older population than Yemen in the year 2000, and the same is also predicted in 2050.

学习点

图表作文的总结是很重要的，因为评分标准有明确规定，不写总结会影响“Task Achievement”的分数。
如果时间不够，宁可主体段少写，也一定要写结尾段的总结。

注意点

• 动态图表和静态图表的总结各有重点。
  动态图表可以归纳趋势，而静态图表没有。
• 如果主体段没有比较，结尾段一定要比较。
• 不要总结所有的信息，选择自己觉得重要的信息（一般是2~3个）。
• 不要出现数据。
  数据是细节，而结尾段是总结。
• 结尾段总结有时可以写在开头段之后。
• 不能使用in conclusion 这样的字眼。
  同样一般不会出现however和therefore这些词(一般只用于观点论述)
• 不能表达个人观点，进行推测和预测。
  图表作文只需要根据数据进行总结和分析，图表里的数据不足以做任何形式的猜测。