IELTS-writing exercise Argumentation_Text_14

传统教育和网络安全+如何扣题Ⅱ

Q: Nowadays, distance-learning programs have gained in popularity(those teaching programmes that involves the use of written materials, videos, televised lessons and the Internet), but some people argue that courses can never be taken as good as those by attending a college or university in person. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

介绍段

背景句

The advent of the Internet has changed the ways people live their lives and complete work.

改写题目

A growing number of people are now considering distance education, which allows them to complete a degree at home.

阐述立场

Even though distance learning is different from traditional college education, distance learning has some advantages in some aspects.

主体部分第一段

中心句（科技发展）

Distance education is more flexible than the traditional way of receiving education, thereby offering learners more educational opportunities.

解释

Students can read relevant materials and attend lectures by watching videos. When they have problems in disgesting information, they can click the pause button and replay the video untl they fully understand the content.

拓展

These distance education courses are available 24 hours a day, 7 days a week, and therefore suitable for those who lead a hectic life, as long as they have Internet access.

主体部分第二段

中心句（学习能力）

The improvements in online education also make it possible for students to communicate with their lecturers whenever necessary.

解释

Students can use interactive communication tools to ask questions in vitural classes or talk to lecturers via email.

结果

In this way, these learners can get lecturers’ guidance immediately, thereby completing all courses more efficiently.

拓展

Despite living in their own countries, they can even communicate with scholars from top universities around the world.

主体部分第三段

观点（社会发展）

A main drawback of online education is that students have found it difficult to improve their social skills because there are few group assignments.

结果

Students complete their degree independently and do not have opportunities to meet each other and socialize together.

拓展结果

They do not have opportunities to build up a network of cntacts, which can have a negative impact on their career development.

结论段

再次表明立场

Distance learning has made university education more accessible, because of its flexibility.

总结观点

However, it has some drawbacks, such as lack of interaction, so it is not able to achieve the same learning outcomes as traditional college education.

Model

The advent of the Internet has changed the ways people live their lives and complete work. A growing number of people are now considering distance education, which allows them to complete a degree at home. Even though distance learning is different from traditional college education, distance learning has some advantages in some aspects.
Distance education is more flexible than the traditional way of receiving education, thereby offering learners more educational opportunities. Students can read relevant materials and attend lectures by watching videos. Students can read relevant materials and attend lectures by watching videos. When they have problems in disgesting information, they can click the pause button and replay the video untl they fully understand the content. These distance education courses are available 24 hours a day, 7 days a week, and therefore suitable for those who lead a hectic life, as long as they have Internet access.
The improvements in online education also make it possible for students to communicate with their lecturers whenever necessary. Students can use interactive communication tools to ask questions in vitural classes or talk to lecturers via email. In this way, these learners can get lecturers’ guidance immediately, thereby completing all courses more efficiently. Despite living in their own countries, they can even communicate with scholars from top universities around the world.
A main drawback of online education is that students have found it difficult to improve their social skills because there are few group assignments. Students complete their degree independently and do not have opportunities to meet each other and socialize together. They do not have opportunities to build up a network of cntacts, which can have a negative impact on their career development.
Distance learning has made university education more accessible, because of its flexibility. However, it has some drawbacks, such as lack of interaction, so it is not able to achieve the same learning outcomes as traditional college education.

学习点-扣题方法（补）

1. 开头段表明立场的时候可以扣题。
2. 不断出现关键词，特别是最后一句。

Improved Model

The advent of the Internet has changed the ways people live their lives and complete work. A growing number of people are now considering distance education, which allows them to complete a degree at home. Although distance learning is differst from traditional college education in some aspects, learners will possibly find that they can gain as much as knowledge from an online course as they do at university.
In distance learning programmes, students can access the same content of degree courses as those who attend lectures in person. They can read relevant materials, such as textbooks and class notes, and attend video lessons, which are recorded lectures of reputable professors. When they have problems in comprehending some key concepts, they can click the pause button and replay the video until they fully disgest information.
The improvements in online education also make it possible for students to communicate with their lecturers whenever necessary. Students can use interactive communication tools to ask questions in vitural classes or talk to lecturers via email. In this way, these learners can get lecturers’ guidance immediately, thereby completing all courses more efficiently. Despite living in their own countries, they can even communicate with scholars from top universities around the world.
While distance education has clear advantages, it may not offer participants the same networking experience they can get in a bricks and mortar college. Students complete their degree independently and do not have opportunities to meet each other and socialize together. This can have a negative impact on their career development in view of the importance of building up a network of contacts. In contrast, those who study at universities can do a wide range of activities on campus such as playing sport and joining clubs, which can help them build close relationships.
In conclusion, interactive technology has enabled learners to communicate with lecturers easily and gain qualifications, so I believe that distance education is now as good as traditional ways of completing a degree at university.
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