Unipus-writing exercise Argumentation_Text_07

城乡转移+混合类题目写作要点+开头段的写作

Q: Many people are moving from rural areas to big cities. Why has this happened? To what extent do you think it is a good trend?

Model

介绍段

背景句

These days many people from rural areas have chosen to migrate to cities.

改写题目

They may believe that they are more likely to find employment and enjoy a better quality of life,but the movement of population to urban areas can cause many problems.

主体部分第一段

中心句

There are two main reasons why these people have flocked to cities.

原因1

Firstly, cities are more densely populated and there are more job opportunities available, so people may earn more money.

结果

This means that they can improve living standards and afford more consumer good than ever before.

对比

By contrast, employment opportunities are scarce in rural areas, due to the fact that many industries are underdeveloped and many inhabitants’ buying power is limited.

原因2

Another reason is that city dwellers have easy access to public services, including education and health care, and enjoy better standards of living.

结果

Young couples intend to send their children to good schools in urban areas, so as to break the cycle of poverty.

主体部分第二段

附加观点

The increased number of urban dwellers can put huge pressure on housing and facilities in cities.

原因

Some cities are unable to accommodate a large population because of the shortage of land.

举例1

Many migrants end up living in slums and enduring poor living conditions, because they can not afford home ownership.

举例2

People are prone to poor health because urban facilities fail to meet the growing demand for clean water, dispose of household waste effectively and manage sewage.

主体部分第三段

中心句（社会）

Another problem associated with a rural-to-urban shift is that rural-urban income disparity will grow, instead of diminishing.

解释

Young people who are ambitious, energetic, hardworking and creative prefer to go to the cities in search of educational and employment opportunities.

结果

The shortage of labor has become a problem in rural communities and it is not easy to revitalize the local economy.

拓展结果

In cities, some young people may choose to commit crimes because of the widening gap between rich and poor.

结论段

总结观点

In conclusion, poor employment prospects and sluggish local economies have caused the population shift to metropolis.

表明立场

This is a worrying trend.

学习点

混合类题目就是题目有两个问题，一个问题属于报告类（问原因或者是解决方法），一个问题属于观点类（问影响）
混合类题目有下面一些要点

1. 两个问题同等重要，都要回答。
2. 每个问题可以用一到两个的观点回答，如果是两个观点，可以分两段写，也可以写在一段。

注意点

1. 如果题目出现两个问题，那么两个问题都要用不同的段落回应。
2. 每个问题可以用一刀两段回答，不需要做到类似长度。
3. 每段话中心句一定要直接回答题目，确保考官知道你在扣题。

开头段的写法

注意点

1. 开头段不要写很长，因为主体部分才是考官的重点阅读部分。
2. 开头段不要犯语法错误。
3. 照抄题目的部分不算字数。
4. 不要使用用烂的一些表达。
5. 改写题目的话不要改变题目的论述重心。

开头段一般写两句，第一局=句一般是背景句，第二句表明立场或者告诉读者文章大概会说什么。
核心是使用词伙，围绕词伙去写背景句。

Improved Model

These days many people from rural areas have chosen to migrate to cities, believing that they are more likely to find employment and enjoy a better quality of life in urban areas, but the movement of population to urban areas can cause many problems.
There are two main reasons why these people have made the decisions.
Firstly, cities are more densely populated and there are more job opportunities available, so they may earn more money.
This means that they can improve living standards and afford more consumer goods than ever before.
By contrast, employment opportunities are scarce in rural areas, due to the fact that many industries are underdeveloped and many inhabitants’ buying power is limited.
Another advantage of urban life is that city dwellers have easy access to public services, including education and health care, and young couples living in the countryside intend to send their children to urban schools to get prepared for better job opportunities in the future.
The increased number of urban dwellers can put huge pressure on housing and facilities in cities.
Some cities are unable to accommodate a large population because of the shortage of land.
Many migrants end up living in slums and enduring poor living conditions, because they can not afford home ownership.
All city dwellers are prone to poor health because urban facilities do not have the capacity to manage waste and sewage effectively and to match the growing demand for clean water.
Another problem associated with a rural-to-urban shift is that rural-urban income disparity will grow, instead of diminishing.
Young people who are ambitious, energetic, hardworking and creative prefer to go to the cities in search of educational and employment opportunities.
The shortage of labor has thus become a problem in rural communities and it is not easy to revitalize the local economy.
In conclusion, poor employment prospects and sluggish local economies have caused the population shift to metropolis.
This is a worrying trend.
注：标色部分为词伙。